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    dots Submission Name: Shit for Veinsdots
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    Author: Sera Rojas
    Elite Ratio:    0.6 - 5/5/8
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.6667
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       mother do ya think im high ENOUGH?


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    dotsShit for Veinsdots
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    8am methadone clinic heiroglyhphic graffiti on
    sunburnt brick walls
    and i dont need
    to be forgiven
    i cant climb barbed wire
    i cant fight a million guards
    i cant rescue you..
    and i hate to ask you to help me
    (because you cant)
    so i go with him
    (forget his name yesterday) and
    he ties the belt around my arm
    and "girl you got shit for veins"
    and i take that hit
    and walk into sunlight oo hot for me
    and my blonde hair is on fire
    and my eyes are gone
    and i know its got to be over over
    soon
    (please?)
    because
    there is nothing more
    than this




    Submitted on 2006-07-30 00:09:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      And this is what we call home? I love this poem! It reminded me of a show I saw on HBO. It wasn't pretty but it was not supose to be. Anyway great write and hope to read much more from you .
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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