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    dots Submission Name: west of westerndots
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    Author: Sera Rojas
    Elite Ratio:    0.6 - 5/5/8
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 665
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotswest of westerndots
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    and im riding high fall in love with all the boys with pinpoint eyes
    slink thru junkie alleyways only lilght i see tonite is
    broken glass on crakcked pavement
    here where it is twilite for eternity and ill see shit i wish youd never even seen
    puking on crumblilng tenement stairways past the rock stars and the hypes
    past the food stamp sellers and celler dwellars
    and i ask you
    DO YOU TRULY KNOW WHAT HOPELESS MEANS?
    yeah well i do
    and im crying
    sitting here waiting for a way out like a division street bus
    that never comes




    Submitted on 2006-07-30 00:17:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your writing cries for the readers atention! I hope you are not living this hell that you write? It would make a great movie about all the people that need some love in there life and how to see a brighter day.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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