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    dots Submission Name: in the time of lilacsdots
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    Author: Sera Rojas
    Elite Ratio:    0.6 - 5/5/8
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    2.0000
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       in the yard


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    dotsin the time of lilacsdots
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    sick sweet smell and i could feel the
    very last goodbyes coming very soon
    as i shy away from black eyes in that mirror
    "out of control"
    and myself in the arms of someone i thought could rescue me from you
    but he couldnt
    you were godlike until they came for you..
    and lets gets some more
    always pulled me away from my escape
    a prison i never really wanted
    freed from
    and now my knight in shining armor
    with blue eyes
    is gone
    and so are you
    and im left
    feeling like no one else does
    and i ...
    i hate you
    but ill let you back
    and you know i will
    if i could just
    shoot my conscience
    id be free
    how could you leave me out here?
    ive got stories ill never tell
    alllmy daydreams are nightmares and
    ive got this constant ancient ache
    and i still wait..still wait


    RIP JODY RIKARD 2004




    Submitted on 2006-07-30 00:29:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Friends and lover are few and far apart,we would go through hell for them and we have because of them. I hope your heart has healed and that you have found someone new?
    This poem was heart felt and thanks for sharing it with us all.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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