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    Author: azure_warrior
    ASL Info:    42 /m/ in my mind.
    Elite Ratio:    5.43 - 44/43/32
    Words: 16
    Class/Type: Haiku/Love
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    Description:
       I quit smoking on Aug. 6th, 2000. I bought a sports car because I knew I could not afford both!
    I don't smoke now because I can't imagine quitting again.
    I smoke in my dreams.
    When I pass displaced smokers huddled smoking outside, I inhale the smoke.
    It STILL feels good!


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    I want you so bad!
    I can't forget about you!
    Goddamn cigarettes!




    Submitted on 2006-07-30 02:08:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      HA I so understand this! I haven't smoked in 7 years but I still dream about smoking...then I wake up feeling guilty :(.
    | Posted on 2006-08-11 00:00:00 | by laursal | [ Reply to This ]
      HAH. That was funny. Not your traditional haiku, but very clever. It wasn't about nature, but you certainly did a good job of relating a definite feeling and image.

    Way to go (with the poem AND the quitting!)

    Annie
    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hee hee!! First of all lemme say YEAY!! Great job giving up them damn things. Now let me say, I can soooooo relate to this! I have smoked since I was 13 and it is truly a love/hate relationship! I actually quit them for 2 years and I was so proud of myself. Then life threw me a curve and I started smoking again...I dont know why. It didnt help my problem get any easier and now I am addicted to the [censored] things again and I am so upset with myself for it. Not to mention I am a registered nurse and a nurse who stinks like cigarettes is really impressive hahahahhaaa! Anyway, I plan to quit again, the same way I did the last time, with the patch. I am just mentally preparing myself for it. I know how hard it was to quit and dread it but it's something I just gotta do for myself...again...*sigh*. Anyway, great haiku. I dont believe I've ever read one about cigarettes before! And remember...dont EVER go back to them damn things! Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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