Description: A fly got in my house and my cat who is related to lions and tigers who are the king of the jungle couldn't even bother with trying to kill it.
So, it was up to me. LOL.
The Only Good One Is a Dead One -------------------------------------------
With lightening speed you dared to go 'round,
I tried to smash you dead.
As if you knew of my killing plan,
You eluded me time and again.
You dared to get close to my lethal weapon.
You stopped on and ran from my plan.
Stop flying, little fly, so I can still you...
Here's some yummy food.........!
lmbo are you serious?! o wow. it would have never crossed my mind to write something like this. very common and yet creative... I like it and I have to give you extra props just for doing something that I would never have even thought of. But I have to say.. I think flies might acutally know thier fate.... otherwise they wouldn't be so difficult >_<
Very Funny I really like how you took a commen household act like trying to rid your house of a fly and really made a creative very well flowing write Great Job I for one very much enjoy simple basic poetry and you have done that with this one and then some God Bless Ron
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron
Okay. That made me laugh. A lot... HAHAHAHAHA. I'm sorry. It was just....soo...funny.
I <3 the title.
"You dared to get close to my lethal weapon. You stopped on and ran from my plan."
That was my favorite part. I can just picture someone with a fly swatter(sp?) crouching down over a bug. So funny, I just about died.
"Me waiting to cause your demise."
That was the only line I didn't like. I just think its little too.... hmmm.... straightforward? Is that the word I'm looking for? I just felt like pointing that out.
Submission Name: The Only Good One Is a Dead One
