She or me? by tina

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Author:	tina_mik
ASL Info:	17/f/malaysia
Elite Ratio:	1.99 - 21/22/20
Words:	75

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	117
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	475

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She or me? dots

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alone she sat
having no clue,
everything she has
never once was true,
confused in her mind
she was left behind,
seeking for guidance
'til today she had none.
she tried to run
as fast as she can,
trying to catch up
but no one lent a hand,
she tried to be strong
but it didn't feel right,
for it has been too long
she has struggled in a fight.

Submitted on 2006-07-30 06:29:34 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  this is a good poem. but in the 12th line it should be "lent" instead of "lend" but otherwise..it was good
| Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by butterflygirl27 | [ Reply to This ]
  Very good. Sort of mysterrious, without driving you over the edge. I liked it. Byeyahs.
~Lizzy~
| Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by Lizzy B | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked the meaning but it could have been better.i can relate to it too .

jenn-bbchery
| Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by bbcherry | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a good poem, but there are some things that didnt sound right in it like "she tried to run
as fast as she can,
trying to catch up
but no one lend a hand,"
Besides that it wuz good, & i liked it. keep up the good work.

{{ Lynoire }}
| Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by bloodydreamer27 | [ Reply to This ]

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