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    dots Submission Name: SigniFicanTdots
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    Author: orpheus
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 188/165/57
    Words: 549
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 1130
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       I have to send a demo to an up and comin group of rappers and i jus thought this up today...


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    dotsSigniFicanTdots
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    The one to win
    Once I'm cut to disk
    Speak freely on the CD first
    Later discuss the script
    The verse lusts to live
    My words bust ya lip
    Off on a tangent
    This is just another trip
    As I navigate the labirynth
    A maze of pages
    Graduate the maverick
    In the face of danger
    The optomist
    Locked in this metropolis
    Searchin a starless sky
    Waitin for the apocolypse
    Nearly robbed of emotion
    Inconsequential
    Treated like just another
    Drop in the ocean
    It's not the devil
    That made me do it
    It's this crazy music
    Habit formed, I daily use it
    No longer the new recruitment
    On my sleeve
    I wear a purple heart
    When i speak
    I tear commercial arts
    I'm the circle with no circumfrence
    The north south east west
    Of every earthly compass

    ''the wordsmith cometh
    in a ghostly form
    on the edge the last frontier
    to fight this lonely war
    if only they had known before
    and understood that my mission is
    significant''

    This citizen
    Hid in a cage
    Like a primitive ape
    Metamorphic
    In the midst of a change
    Chiseling stone
    In order to carve my path
    Through indisciminate hate
    The judgement of the darkest hearts
    Blatent statements
    From those who would make it famous
    But who'd never lost it all
    to've slept on the vagrents pavement
    You can taste this fragrence
    Of my personel Lebanon
    Waxed the lyrical
    Verse with skill a letter bomb
    Words can kill
    So I'll never say ''I'm never wrong''
    Till the day Heavens song is sung
    And weapons drop with love
    I'm a write with spirit
    Fight with lyrics till it's done
    The come-back-king
    With unmatched agility
    The gift of untapped ability
    Writes a vivid scene
    The poetry
    Breathes life back into
    My hope's and dreams

    ''the wordsmith cometh
    in a ghostly form
    on the edge the last frontier
    to fight this lonely war
    if only they had known before
    and understood that my mission is
    significant''

    This is for the love of the game
    Never conveted fame
    Hang tough and be
    The one ta remain
    taking the strain like Atlas
    The weight-lifter
    With a grimace on my face
    Words form the image
    Of the Shape-shifter
    The rhyme leaves the
    Page ripped up
    My mind bleeds
    The same sick stuff
    Past the sweat and the tears
    To laugh in the face
    Of my death and my fears
    A heart full of grace that displaces
    The jests of my peers
    The tests of my years
    Until this chronical's known
    Written on the pages of history
    By an honourable soul
    One of the last sage's of symmetry
    Ride the wave's of my
    Lyrical imagery
    The upwelling and the tide
    From my spiritual injuries over flows
    Into the lines of this poem i wrote
    As i haunt this open road

    ''the wordsmith cometh
    in a ghostly form
    on the edge the last frontier
    to fight this lonely war
    if only they had known before
    and understood that my mission is
    significant''





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    ||| Comments |||
      I think the rhyming was pretty much on target, and the message was well rendered. Nice job. My only note otherwise is that some typos remain:
    line 16, apocolipse needs a "y" instead of "i".
    Also, should "wodsmith" perhaps be "wordsmith"?

    Just thought I'd mention those, though they really do not detract from the piece at all. Again, nice job, John.
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by coyote | [ Reply to This ]
      yo this is amazing. another fave from me. it was kinda hard to follow cuz the rhyming was all over the place but i caught most of it...i think. i bet if i heard it recorded i would be blown away cuz i'm already amazed just by reading it. u will get signed. trust me
    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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