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    dots Submission Name: all the samedots
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    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 711
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1463



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       another quick one it needs tweeking tho.
    kyrenia


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    dotsall the samedots
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    do you ever dream of what could have been?/
    had regrets on things you have done and seen/
    given love and now wish you could take it back/
    felt like a fool after acting like a twat/
    always trying to find someone else to blame/
    dont frorget that we are all the same./

    so take a look around/

    you think that they have got it better than you/
    but they think you have got it better too/
    so lose all thoughts of lifes hard stress/
    stop trying to work out who is the best/
    so we might just have different names/
    but remember this we are all the same/

    we take stand, stand the need and need love/
    but whatever is given, it just isnt enough/
    we force ourselves to cry as our tears are solid/
    convincing higher beings that our lives are horrid/
    but for one moment take a step back/
    stop moaning about the things that you lack/

    so take a look around/

    you think that they have got it better than you/
    but they think you have got it better too/
    so lose all thoughts of lifes hard stress/
    stop trying to work out who is the best/
    so we might just have different names/
    but remember this we are all the same/

    you think that they have it better than you/
    but the truth is that you dont think at all do you?/

    we are all the same.




    Submitted on 2006-07-30 14:18:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OHMYGOD. THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THIS. THIS IS EXACTLY WHAT I NEEDED RIGHT NOW. THIS IS AMAZING. I LOVED IT. PERFECT
    | Posted on 2007-01-29 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem. it has a good flow to it. and does use good Imagery also. The only thing i don't understand is the "/" at the end of every line? but i am not that professional at poetry. keep up the good work.

    R.bayden
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this, it was very catchy and said a lot of things but mainly that underneath it all, all of the images and things that people possess, we are all basically the same. I enjoyed this work.
    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by concrete_rose | [ Reply to This ]
      my favorite part of this was the second stanza. this is really good. i'm sick of people whining and moaning about how hard life is. always making excuses when the only reason their lives suck is because they lack the motivation or inner stregnth to make it better. they are weak. even more so that they complain about how lucky other people are. do something with ur life.
    | Posted on 2006-08-04 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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