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    dots Submission Name: Delta Quicksanddots
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    Author: the nerdbomb
    ASL Info:    15/F/right here
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 49/73/63
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       i don't know. yet another sleep depraved piece of work. the quote at the end is supposed to be the poem whispered by the man in line 12. its actually from a book i recently read called "Coming Attractions" the book was alright but this little poem stuck w/ me.
    this poem is about running but always being brought back to where you were running from. the man w/ flesh caught in his sneer is sybolizing whatever is keeping you from escaping. so i guess thats what it is.


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    dotsDelta Quicksanddots
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    chopping blocks
    ankle locks
    and all the other things that make you scream
    as blood runs down the hanging trees
    they broke your legs right at the knee
    so your body will stay
    and never ever leave

    running fast
    you collapse
    and it all becomes so absolutely very clear
    kisses by the man w/ flesh caught in his sneer
    whispers the last words that you'll hear
    so you fall sleep
    and awake w/ fear

    "i heard it's gonna rain.
    i heard it's gonna freeze

    i heard its gonna blow the moss off all the goddam trees"





    Submitted on 2006-07-30 17:14:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a good poem but a little confusing, I'm sure it would make more sense to me if I read that book you read, but that's ok. I like the metaphores in it, and the wording. You did a good job on this piece. Hope to read more from you soon. :)

    ~Cris
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]


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