this is a little short to be lyrics, I think. There copuld be a small tune, and the words have quite a power behind them. I like the message, and it is given well, with a large span of words, and not much cliché going on. I like what you did with this peice. Wishing for more ~Brian
im not ususally big on reading lyrics, because of the size, so this was a sudden shock that it was so short, and yeah, i will agree with everyone else that it is a bit too short. in general though you have made a very good start. i would say that what is written here makes a first verse. i'll keep my eye out for the rest of the song.
Well...hm....I'm not sure what to say. Its pretty good. I like the meaning of it and everything but you have it marked as lyrics so I think it could be just a little longer. Plus I like all of it except for the last line. I just feel like you could have used different words. But thats just me. But all together it was a good write. Can't wait to read more of your work.