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    dots Submission Name: Always afraid.dots
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    Author: BloodtornAngel
    ASL Info:    16/f/ hell
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 21/27/42
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 98
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsAlways afraid.dots
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    I'm so scared,
    so worried.
    My stomachs in knots,
    and my throat is so dry.
    My hands are shaking,
    and my voice quivers.
    My hair hangs limp,
    and my early morning eye-liner stains my eyes.
    I thought to myself,
    'you helped me once,
    but you've hurt me more.'
    Don't make me repeat this,
    I can't say it again.

    Now I'm running away,
    I can't hear his Response.
    If i had turned i would have seen.

    You were so scared,
    so worried.
    Your stomach was in knots,
    and your throat was so dry.
    Your hands were shaking,
    and your voice quivered
    Your hair was a mess,
    and your lip was bleeding.
    As you thought to yourself,
    'You hurt me once,
    but you've helped me more.'

    He turned softly and
    sadly.
    Tears streaking
    his cheeks."I've loved you forever, I wish you could know, But I'm just so scared to care, so scared to hurt you."

    They turned once more to see the other leaving, and without the least comprehension they both said.
    "And because of fear we'll be forever alone"






    Submitted on 2006-07-30 21:33:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed the way you used the same words to reflect both people, to show they were in the same situation but would inevitably still leave each other alone, it had a romeo and juliet star crossed lovers tragedy feel to it. ~Sunset
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by sunset | [ Reply to This ]
      This has to be one of my favorite pieces that I have read! This was very well written! I also really enjoyed how you used the same words to show they were in similar situations yet still different. This was creative.
    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]



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