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    dots Submission Name: Patterndots

    Author: Avril54
    Elite Ratio:    3.44 - 163/206/34
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I just want to know if you think I should omit the word 'the' on the stanza. Thanx

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    In order
    Each block

    the pattern.

    Submitted on 2006-07-30 21:40:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      leave the word THE in ur write it fits. I'm intrigued by ur write, it's powerful. Too me it says that humanity is the same, but still unique. Each person is different, but are all trying to achieve the same goal. Brillant!!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-18 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      im Asking the same question as the guy under me.
    | Posted on 2006-10-14 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      What pattern :o what's the hidden message. YOU MUST TELL ME. grrr.

    -- Jason Clement
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by Jason_Clement | [ Reply to This ]
      I would leave the word The in this write
    That word creates conclussion to the emotion you are writing about
    I find this write very thought provoking and this almost brings tears to my eyes because I can definately feel pain hidden behind your words
    Great Job
    God Bless

    Please keep in touch!!!
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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