Description: William Carlos Williams was a poet who typed his poems over and over and over on the typewriter changing the line breaks until he got it just the way he wanted it. So that's what I did, and as an experiment, I worked it into an acrostic - just for fun. I know that it doesn't make sense and that it's weird, but I am kinda weird, too!
WILL, I AM CARLOS. WILLIAMS W.,
ILL I AM. CARL O'SWIL,
LIAM S. WILL. I AM CAR
I AM! S WILLI
AMCAR LO SWILLIA?
MS. WILLIAM C. ARLOS WILL. IAM S? WILL I AM!
C ARLO? “S WIL,” LI
AMSWILL, “I AM CA –
LIAMS W. ILL. I AM CARL
O’SWILL! I AM
SWILLIA… MC ARLOS
WILL. I AM S WILL;
I AM CARLOS. WIL
LIA MS WIL?
LIA M CARL, O, S.W.,
IL LIAM SWILLI!
AM CARL OS WILLIA?
MS. WILLIAM CARLOS WILLIAM
haha you are awesome! i have NEVER seen anything like this and i doubt i would have ANY chance of being able to see so many things in one name/word to keep me going as long as you did...
this is brilliant! i love it when ppl try out new stuff and find their own twist on it... this is truely brilliant... i aint got much else to say other wow and ooo and yay and praise you all day long so i will shut up but know the praise continues long after the fingers stop typing this message!
WILL, I AM CARLOS. WILLIAMS W., ILL I AM. CARL O'SWIL, LIAM S. WILL. I AM CAR LOS. WILL I AM! S WILLI AMCAR LO SWILLIA? MS. WILLIAM C. ARLOS WILL. IAM S? WILL I AM! C ARLO? “S WIL,” LI AMSWILL, “I AM CA – R LOSWIL?” LIAMS W. ILL. I AM CARL O’SWILL! I AM SWILLIA… MC ARLOS WILL. I AM S WILL; I AM CARLOS. WIL LIA MS WIL? LIA M CARL, O, S.W., IL LIAM SWILLI! AM CARL OS WILLIA? MS. WILLIAM CARLOS WILLIAM S!
Congratulations! You've developed a surrealist, concrete form of literay rebellion that some on the site have already claimed makes no sense (how does it feel to be an outcast among outcasts, eh?). This is less like poetry and more like the development of a new langauge (enjambed Esperanto?). You've restored my faith in poetry as lunacy.
Nicely done. Are you considering Martian Haiku next? Just a thought. Take care. Bill.
In terms of pushing creative boundaries, this does it... amalgamating concrete 'visual' poetry, abstract experimentation in enjambment (which as you said, Williams liked to do with his line breaks) mixed within an acrostic form. '
I think this is a stepping stone for you towards a greater materialization of this type of spatial-art-poetry. Definitely weird and interesting and I can't fault that.
This isn't EXACTLY an acrostic. An acrostic is where each letter of of the phrase starts a new sentence. Good acrostics can usually tie in each sentence to something and even sometimes rhyme. Anyway, this peice really can't be comented for style, because there really isn't any. Anyway... Wishing for more ~ Brian
Well this was certainly interesting! I thought that in some places the punctuation could make the words more...well, make them make more sense. This was kind of confusing, and got old after just a little while. Ihave to wonder, what made you think of something like this? This was completely random!
I think that if you used regular letter as well, the fragments might make more sense.