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    dots Submission Name: Fading Awaydots
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    Author: Jbaby
    ASL Info:    17/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 1/2/4
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 689
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    Bytes: 479



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       They ways never woked so need somethin new


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    dotsFading Awaydots
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    nobody knows im fading away ive tried it once but now a differnt way first was the pills now its my rist I hope to god I make it through this Ill slit my rist and hit the vain watch the blood flow Idk maybe ill go this time or the next it wouldent be the first As i slit my rist Hope it dont hurt hope theres not much pain maybe i can do it another way pull out the gun put it 2 my head an say................( i guess youll never know why i did it)


    Jarrod




    Submitted on 2006-07-31 09:24:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I must say this is very very sloppy
    - not the way things get posted here.
    It's ok if you have an own style, but this is just crap. and thats me only talking about the looks now. It does not necessarily have to be a poem, proper punctuation only would be enough.
    Consider maybe this:

    Nobody knows I'm fading away,
    I've tried it once, but now a different way.
    First were the pills, now it's my wrist,
    - I hope to God I make it through this -
    I'll slit my wrist and hit the vain,
    watch the blood flow, I don't know,
    Maybe I'll go this time, or maybe it's the next,
    it would'nt be the first...
    As I slit my wrist
    Hope it won't hurt, hope there's not much pain. Maybe I can do it another way,
    pull out the gun, put it to my head and say...

    I guess you'll never know why i did it

    I've been very nice to you now, I didn't need to this. I think others won't even have a look at it like this, and I figure that's not what you want.

    About the contents, It's a bit chaotic, but I guess it fits the theme.. But aim for telling things we did not yet know. There's a lot of cutters out here, me being one of them, but you at least want to challenge a reader and not spoon feed them.
    This is too easy.

    J
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by Darth Zeus | [ Reply to This ]


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