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    dots Submission Name: Death's Kissdots
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    Author: ROSHAY9992000
    ASL Info:    22/m/fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.18 - 16/12/12
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 803
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 831



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    dotsDeath's Kissdots
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    My soul is relinquished to suffering
    Solitary purpose of existence is to die
    Praying this heart beats not once more
    Paralyzed by fantasies unspoken
    Enchanted nightmares I dream of my demise
    I smell the rotting flesh
    And sounds of obscured torture
    My malicious morbid perception
    For which self-annihilation is my mission
    Feeling every dark sensation
    As the vengeance boils in my blood
    My soul is saturated with sin
    Death has gripped my veins
    Forced a painful deadly incision
    Gushing into his chalice the blood goes
    Images fading ever so slowly
    He drinks my blood, concentrates on death
    I am awakened by my screams
    Eyes now wide-open, covered by a glaze
    For death's kiss was only a dream




    Submitted on 2006-07-31 10:11:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love the liquid electricity. and this poem just brings the flavor back to my mouth. i really like this piece and i truly hope to read more by you soon. you are an amazing writer. keep posting. love tina
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem you're use of words is great, and I love how you discribe the dream I really like how you ended it.

    My fav part of you're poem is:

    "My malicious morbid perception
    For which self-annihilation is my mission
    Feeling every dark sensation
    As the vengeance boils in my blood
    My soul is saturated with sin
    Death has gripped my veins
    Forced a painful deadly incision
    Gushing into his chalice the blood goes"

    The discription has my imagination runing circles.

    -darkeveris
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by darkeveris | [ Reply to This ]


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