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    dots Submission Name: Blahdots
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    Author: fiery whisper
    ASL Info:    21/F/Bangladesh
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 51/49/33
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 154
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 668



    Description:
       Its not finished, but it came in this surge and ended over there. I wish I could finish it, but well...


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    Many more mountains to climb
    Before the angel of death takes me away,
    Many more flights to fly
    Until the body is left to decay.

    Swam through the deep ends of the ocean
    Passed through the halls of fire;
    And now here I am standing alone,
    Waiting for the funeral pyre.

    The sea rises above in challenge,
    As the lightning touches the land,
    I wait in silence for my ride
    And the hourglass fills with sand.

    And suddenly,
    It comes in a myriad of blue
    Swaying with the breeze, diving with the wind
    A solitary figure amongst the cottony hue.




    Submitted on 2006-07-31 11:37:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Gives me a feeling of a fantasy world... Looks fit to end up in some fantasy novel. Lol. Clever rhyming. Want to read it when it is complete. Hope you finish it soon and post it.

    - Saaber Shoyeb
    | Posted on 2007-06-03 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a real good start
    I can feel the journey you are describing thru life
    I urge you to try and go back over this and add some more of the same emotion you carried in this write to a strong conclussion
    I like where this write is headed
    I can see you are finding Peace in Life and that is a Beautiful Thing
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]



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