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    dots Submission Name: The New and the Useddots
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    Author: BlueHeart
    ASL Info:    14/M/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 14/24/19
    Words: 712
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 632
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    Description:
       Still not poetry. I'm attempting to get a job writing a column on relationships for a teen magazine. This is one that truly depicts my writing style. Don't you dare critique it. I believe every writer has his/her own style and will disagree with every other writer's style. So in a sense unless it has grammar or spelling mistakes don't tell me how to write.


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    dotsThe New and the Useddots
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    Everything I thought I knew about love was wiped away yesterday when one of my friends told me I knew nothing about love because I haven't had the experience of being in love. You have no idea how much this made me think. It's true I've never been in love and apparently I don't have the credentials to tell whether I'm in love with Byron or not.
    Although I'm gay I believe anybody can fall in love with anyone. I can honestly say I've been in love with grown fond of a person of the opposite sex (Sorry, I forgot I've never experienced that.) However, since I don't look for women it would be very rare for me to 'grow fond of' one again. That's still not the point I'm trying to make though.
    I basically talk the talk, but don't walk the walk. I've read the books, but I can't say I've experienced them for myself. I'm out on the market as a new, running hybrid full of new things and new experiences. But I couldn't help wonder

    What's the difference between the new and used?

    So, last night I was talking with Byron while watching Carrie Bradshaw finish up yet another great column. I suddenly had to blurt out the question:

    "Do you like your significant other to be new or used?"

    "Hmmmmmmm......that's a hard one. I'd have to say new though"

    "Why?" Could he be sending me some kind of message?

    "Because you can teach them things, like how to do certain things"

    "Wow"

    "What?"

    "That's interesting. So you like your guys straight from the factory, not recycled?"

    "Yea.......why?"

    "I like mine recycled. It shows that they've already learned things like how I have with you"

    I guess at one point every person is a new product out on the market. Fresh meat for any buyer waiting for a new experience. The brand new product waiting to be used, just waiting. A lot of people that talk to me regularly are recylced pieces of well oiled machinery.
    There was a difference between the new and the used, I just couldn't figure it out. It seemed my used friends were caught up in relationships all the time, while I was left in the dust. Again I couldn't help but wonder

    "Am I simple? Answer honestly I need to know Byron."

    "Like, how?"

    "New, easy to get to. Simple to catch. An easy target?"

    The more and more I thought about it, I was simple. I knew he sensed my frustration.

    "No.....no, you're not simple. If anything you're complicated. You're not easy to figure out. It took me a really long time to actually understand you"

    And that's where it hit me. I was simple, and I knew it. I didn't have any baggage, and Byron had so much. It was as if I was the new employee at a store, and he was the manager. I was new, he's been used. He's had so much experience, and I've had none at all.
    That was it. Between the new and used people throughout our world, baggage is probably what affects what kind of people we are, and what we will become. It might hold us back from several opportunities, while throwing us into even more windows. But, between a relationship baggage is severely important. The new don't have baggage, or as much as the used. The used have baggage from past relationships.
    So although I may not know anything about love, or being in love, I know now that there is a difference between the new and the used. Good Night and Good Luck.




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      this sounds like a very personal write although there is nothing to say that can help u do better i can say i really liked this one...good job
    keep writing...check out my poems...i just wrote 2

    ~Amber
    | Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by Amberger | [ Reply to This ]
      i liek it. its so good. wow. its really honest. i like how you put it. i would want someone experienced to. keep up the great work. you are an amazing writer. i hope to read more by you soon. keep posting.
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, wow. There is no need to critique anything about this except spelling and grammar. Basically just punctuation inside the quotations, and a few capitalization errors. I'd hire you instantly, because this is just the thing teen magazines need. Honesty. Not 'how to make yourself sexy to your crush;' raw thoughts and speculations. I'm looking into you. *squints*

    Mel
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by Melora | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a very personal write. it is well constructed and very interesting. i agree that every person does have their own style, and there will always be at least one person who doesn't like it but you have a real talent and shouldn't let what anyone says get in the way of their passion. this blog is really good and i would definitely be very interested in reading a second part of this. i like how it all flows together and i think you could definitely get a job at a teen magazine. i think you would be very helpful to many teens going through the same thing as you. i know you have helped me already.
    good job and keep writing!
    ~nickie.
    | Posted on 2006-08-21 00:00:00 | by LossOfHope03 | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel like I know you, like a close personal friend. Especially since im in the same situation right now. I can just imagine you siting on your couch watching sex and the city and talking on the phone(Sounds kinda creppy). But yeah, I think that if youve found love you'll know it.

    Love is something we're all born knowing.


    Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by TheYoungWolf | [ Reply to This ]


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