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    dots Submission Name: the way we aredots
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    Author: bbcherry
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 79/34/16
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1179
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 362



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    dotsthe way we aredots
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    stuck in a moment
    stuck in time
    stuck in this world
    this place, of mine

    how did i get here?
    when will i leave
    my mind in wonder
    sometimes in grieve

    what was i made for
    why is life this way
    how do i open the door?
    for a new life to play







    Submitted on 2006-07-31 13:13:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      U could use caps and grammar work (structure) but aside that I thought it was a great piece, very deep.
    | Posted on 2006-10-21 00:00:00 | by mikepyro7 | [ Reply to This ]
      the meaing of life one thing we all come to cross some time in our life this is a great way of kind of descibing a way a mind would think of this problem seeing as it is question and no onw has an answer i think your approach on this was unique in a sence that i hve not seen any one do it in this way and i realy like the

    ' what was i made for
    why is life this way
    how do i open the door?
    for a new life to play'

    keep up the good work

    Rak ^)
    | Posted on 2006-08-11 00:00:00 | by dark figure | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a good poem. i liked the way you wrote it and how you used the rhyme. Joanna
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this one...The rhyme was good, and without a lack of rhythm. The way you wrote it is very nice. Good write, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by chaos_bite | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it. but l'd put in caps like she said. and good use of question marks and commas!!!
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by butterflygirl27 | [ Reply to This ]
      It's great! You might want to put in some capitals though. Otherwise, I loved it!
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by Pirate | [ Reply to This ]


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