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    dots Submission Name: Living Death Tolldots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       i wrote this last night. i was feeling like crap.


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    dotsLiving Death Tolldots
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    Aburn on the body
    The pain going deep
    Longing for sunrise
    Longing for sleep

    I just found this trail
    I'll follow this path
    I'll sit in the tub
    Of this memory bath

    Soaking in nightmares
    Drying in pain
    Only one road
    Thats Suicide Lane

    Dreaming in colors
    Living in dark
    I think this evil
    Has just made its mark

    It touches my body
    Arouses my soul
    I think I've just paid
    My living death toll




    Submitted on 2006-07-31 14:18:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      so now that the toll is paid are you debtless? your use of illusion is wonderful. it flowed well... tell me why dream of colors when you live in the dark? isnt it worth it... look at them , colorful sheep scurrying about with meaningless exsistance. great read by the way!
    blackie
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by blackhart | [ Reply to This ]
      This is somewhat tragic, but I like it very much. I usually don't like poems about suicide lately, but this one was good. It didn't just drone on and on about how you were going to kill yourself and why everyone should pity you. However, I hope you don't actually go through with these actions.
    LeAnna <')))><
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      wow that is good but it soundslike you are have great trouble in your life... and i hope what ever it is you get through it... if you are having trouble.... i think that you need to really think about what you are gonna do before you do it though....
    Dakota
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by bjafreak | [ Reply to This ]


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