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    dots Submission Name: man in the mirror (extended)dots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dotsman in the mirror (extended)dots
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    I can't say that I'm happy but/
    what other way/
    is there to live without a crutch/
    I think I gotta say/

    life ain't a game/
    just like how love doesn't aim/
    and my claim to fame/
    will prolly be shame/
    and the man in the mirror is a man without a name/
    got a strong past which he refuses to proclaim/

    its just a life that he left behind/
    confides in me for my rhymes/
    tells not a soul, and he'll take the time/
    break down details, provide the accurate shine/


    I can't say that I'm happy but/
    what other way/
    is there to live without a crutch/
    I think I gotta say?

    once youve realized your faults, its time you modify/
    the actions that you take, and stop living a lie/
    I"m just giving advice that should help you discover/
    once you convince your self then you can tell yet another/
    corrupted soul, but I don't feel conceit/
    I've changed, now the way they behave got me sick like raw meat/


    I can't say that I'm happy but/
    what other way/
    is there to live without a crutch/
    I think I gotta say/

    I smoke and joke tryin to relieve pain/
    but I'm as concieved strange,when people see me rap mayne/
    some people love it and tell me that I"m hot/
    some shake they head, and flat out tell me that I"m not




    Submitted on 2006-07-31 19:18:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that last stanza really stock out to me cuz it's so true. u got people that are loving ur [censored] and those who hate and try to bash ur dreams. good [censored] man. this is going on my faves.
    | Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by young p | [ Reply to This ]


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