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    dots Submission Name: Metha-dontdots
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    Author: Sera Rojas
    Elite Ratio:    0.6 - 5/5/8
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 609
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 767



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    dotsMetha-dontdots
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    time is the master
    and past is a disaster
    wish i had run so long ago
    if on ly from myself

    myself is the monster
    in the mirror
    nothing left to be afraid of

    laid in cells sweaty sick
    laid in my own bed feeling the
    same damn way
    and i can run and run
    but im chained struck down
    by innocuous pink stuff in
    a tiny little bottle
    and theres no one to bail me out
    mother cant you understand
    how sick your little girl is?
    crying out in pain and deperation
    and mother your just as tired of
    me as i am
    sick of my tears that have poured out the same
    old cry for all these years
    time ...is a disaster




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      Sometimes pain is all we know? I have felt so low that I thought I would never be able to get up, then you here of someone elses pain and it makes yours look like a day at the fair. Sorry you have had such a bad life and if there was anything I could do I would, but we are but strangers in passing and all I can offer is my kind words.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      it was deep. it makes me want to give you a hug. i know the feeling of how no one notices your pain. i also know what it feels like to look in the mirror and see nothing. it spoke to me. i didn't know what innocuous was. haha. i really hope things get better for you.
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by MizBeeHaveN | [ Reply to This ]


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