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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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       In my English class, we were having this discussion about how when you read the biographies of the famous published poets they all seem to have such dark, dysfunctional backgrounds. And all the secrets leak out in their work.


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    God, please donít let my son become a poet.
    You know what they do with their passive agrressive little minds.
    They trot out all the family secrets in metaphors and symbolism,
    and they think the rest of us are too slow to figure it out.
    They stick it to their fathers for being absent or drunk or stupid or dead.
    They make their mothers into monsters who couldnít show enough affection
    or showed too much, and they announce to the world I never cleaned house
    and I was an embarrassment and they saw me naked.
    So what if I thought you were weak, or forgot your birthday,
    or took off for a month to find myself or get lost.
    Couldnít you see how it was, with your father
    constantly absent or drunk or stupid or dead?
    Ití s always something, isnít it -
    Why canít you just tell me that you hate me?




    Submitted on 2006-07-31 20:03:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Funny but true! Can we not write poetry without a sordid past? Is misery the training ground for poets? If so, is it no wonder that our "squeaky-clean politicians" lack the compassion of a poetic heart? Hmm....

    I guess their writings would be an embarassment to them without the excuse of it being a product of their upbringing. At times they sound the same horn as convicts. Maybe it's just a different form of expressing the same ideas. "A host of daffodils" or "a heist of emeralds", "Stopping by woods" or "shootings in hoods": is it not all the same?

    Is the poetic heart just a reason not to kill? Is Ted Kaczynski just a poet gone mad? God, it's frightening. Hopefully, there is more to the poet's talent and imagination than just a conditioned response to childhood torture. I certainly hope so.

    Nice poem, enjoyed it.

    Phil
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ]
      This made me laugh :) The teenage angst of the young poet, blaming parents and choking on the self-righteousness of inexperience, pointing fingers with the "art" of rhyme, because they don't know [censored] about the world or that nothing is easy, or that no one really has it figured out, until it's too late and the mistakes can't be undone... I so hear you! I, of course, hated my parents until I figured out, good grief, did I come with a User's Guide, or a set of instructions for good overall mental development? You finally have to reach a point of just admiring the fact that you weren't thrown in a garbage can at birth, or traded for a few crack rocks... There comes a point when you're responsible for your own misery, and you can't keep blaming everyone else. After all, if you're old enough to make a sandwich, you should be old enough to find a way to deal with things and take care of yourself, without using the crutch of "Parents suck." Don't worry, he'll figure this out at some point, but it's going to take a few [censored]-slaps of reality to make it happen... or an unplanned kid bouncing on his knee, waiting to repeat the cycle, before it's crystal clear. I feel for you. I wouldn't want a poet for a child, either. I can barely stand myself at times, much less reading about my shortcomings on someone else's indignant page. Hang in there!
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by grey_girl | [ Reply to This ]
      where did THIS come from? interesting piece. i'm not really sure what else to say. sorry, i have to go get drunk and beat my son...he'll need material.
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem! Very funny, but (as nearly everyone has said) true. I particularly like the way in which you moved from a general characterization to one of yourself, of your own "mistakes".

    They make their mothers into monsters who couldnít show enough affection
    or showed too much, and they announce to the world I never cleaned house
    and I was an embarrassment and they saw me naked.

    It's interesting to read this, as I'm a writer of poetry. I suppose I *do* tend to write about the darkest family secrets. Your poem is a response in itself to the poetry of another individual, one who has exposed your secrets. I like the fact that you took a darker subject and placed it in a wittier, funnier class. Nice work.

    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by HopesAndDreams | [ Reply to This ]
      Hah! Like so many of your others, this one made me smile with a vengeance. I love the cynical point of view, and the pleading hope of redemption heh heh. It is so real. I love to think that you actually feel this way, because...it is just so funny! This goes on the favorites, for sure.
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Aetha Daemon | [ Reply to This ]


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