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    dots Submission Name: These Wordsdots
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    Author: Anarius
    ASL Info:    24/m/somewhere in Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 631/678/168
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1265
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 978



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    dotsThese Wordsdots
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    I'm writing
    as I lie here in my cell
    convicted for stealing
    secret dreams.
    And once
    I even stole a garden.
    Though it wasn't my fault,
    for she told me to.
    The lady I always waited for
    on the corner of
    Risks and Regrets.
    The lady they called
    and eagles wings
    and pain.
    Dressed in March,
    April and May.
    She wore those colours well.
    But these words
    I write
    are not for her.
    These words
    I write
    are candles
    for you
    and me
    when the world wakes
    to a lightless dawn.
    These words
    are my secret stolen dreams
    that we will remember
    when sleep is lost
    in forever night.
    These words
    do not sound like
    prison cries,
    but they are mine
    and I will share them
    with
    only you.




    Submitted on 2006-07-31 22:05:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I haven't read your stuff in a while, but it's every bit as good as I remember. You capture so much imagination in your short lines, a wistful, wandering journey.
    Fav bits include
    'convicted for stealing
    secret dreams.'
    and
    'I always waited for
    on the corner of
    Risks and Regrets.'
    Hope you keep posting.
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by Von Django | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! the best poetry ive seen on this site! some how, your the only one here that seems to know how to make words glide from the page to the mind smothly.
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by Gwenith Louise | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the way you wrote this, I'm not much into structure I much prefer to let my words run away with me. I love the theme of the 'stolen' dreams and the prison cell. My favourite lines were:
    "Dressed in March,
    April and May.
    She wore those colours well.
    But these words
    I write
    are not for her.
    These words
    I write
    are candles
    for you
    and me
    when the world wakes
    to a lightless dawn. "
    Actually pretty much the whole poem it had such a simple elegance to it, I don't know how to describe it really but it got me :)
    It's definately a favourite so much more original than some of the other poems around. If you ever get the chance I'd love to hear your comments on some of my writes.
    ~Sunset
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by sunset | [ Reply to This ]


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