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    dots Submission Name: A Lust for Lovedots
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    Author: Chicool2
    ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266/260/60
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 899
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       In my piece, a woman is near another whom she thinks she deeply passions for, but as she tries to say I love you, she realizes that no words could leave her mouth and she is stuck in a lust for love


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    dotsA Lust for Lovedots
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    Pages turned before her in a simple
    Yet exquisite way, her fingertips caress
    The soft neck of another
    Her eyes watch the lips and leaves
    a reminiscent kiss upon the other

    Why is it that when she goes to
    say the forbidden fruit of words
    strung together so simply
    That the words cannot leave her mouth. . .

    She conspires a lust for love
    Nothing more, nothing less
    No feeling in that deep unforsaken place
    That used to be her heart
    Lined with joy and laughter
    Now with nothing left
    But a tear and a nonchalant longing
    For the lust for love




    Submitted on 2006-08-01 09:00:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I absolutely fell in love with this poem! I love the title 'A lust for love'. Usually it's either lust or love, but you fin a way to combine the two in perpetual synergy to make this beautiful piece of poetry.

    It sort of just rolls off the tongue, ya know?

    I <3 this poem.

    Keep Writing, you're great!
    Danni
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by BlueHeart | [ Reply to This ]


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