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A Lust for Love

Author: Chicool2
ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266 /260 /60
Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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In my piece, a woman is near another whom she thinks she deeply passions for, but as she tries to say I love you, she realizes that no words could leave her mouth and she is stuck in a lust for love

A Lust for Love

Pages turned before her in a simple
Yet exquisite way, her fingertips caress
The soft neck of another
Her eyes watch the lips and leaves
a reminiscent kiss upon the other

Why is it that when she goes to
say the forbidden fruit of words
strung together so simply
That the words cannot leave her mouth. . .

She conspires a lust for love
Nothing more, nothing less
No feeling in that deep unforsaken place
That used to be her heart
Lined with joy and laughter
Now with nothing left
But a tear and a nonchalant longing
For the lust for love

Submitted on 2006-08-01 09:00:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I absolutely fell in love with this poem! I love the title 'A lust for love'. Usually it's either lust or love, but you fin a way to combine the two in perpetual synergy to make this beautiful piece of poetry.

It sort of just rolls off the tongue, ya know?

I <3 this poem.

Keep Writing, you're great!
| Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by BlueHeart | [ Reply to This ]

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