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    dots Submission Name: ** Lovedots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 739
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dots** Lovedots

    I love you
    How can you see passed that
    I understand you want to pass me by
    But I don't think I can let you

    You don't know what your missing out on
    As you walk away from me
    You don't know who much I love you
    Or what I'd do to keep you

    I love you
    But you don't seem to care
    Leave me here untouched and broken
    As I try and bury my passion.

    Submitted on 2006-08-01 10:54:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is really deep for how little words there are, you're not too bad of a writer, i'm surprised that this little of people comment your work. i've been in that position, people can be so cruel when it comes to love and hearts, it's truley sad how we go around hardly caring about the other person, we break hearts like some type plague. it's really good i hope you keep writing so i can read your future work.

    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... very very deep, and even more so beautiful. A very simple poem, but with every word, I can feel the complications pouring out... I can't really put into words just how much this changed my mood... not quite sad, but more peace ridden, I really really loved this writing, a sure favorite, I'd give this poem a 10 out of 10... spread your words like fire

    Sincerely yours with a bloody kiss,

    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Naymless | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this piece, I can relate to it. I felt that way for a long time with the one I'm with now. I wasn't sure where he stood with me and I kept hoping things would turn around. Eventually they did. I know the feeling when you see the person you love but they don't have feelings for you back, it's hard to deal with and I've been on both sides of that fence. People who like me but I can't find feelings for them and I couldn't lie to myself. I really enjoyed this poem and I hope if it's from the heart that everything works out for you. Good job :).

    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]

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