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Author: MurphyGirl44
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A string of pearls laying in the sand
Picking them up with old and wrinkled hands
she holds them to her chest.
Gently rubbing off the sand from each one..
Closing her eyes, breathing in the salty sea air her mind floods with memories..
* * * * * * *
Dancing in the night with her head against his chest,the music slow, and the waves crashing against their feet
Him kissing her neck, tugging playfully on her pearls
It tickles and she giggles, then he brings her in for a kiss
Her breath catches in her throat and time stops for a moment
The kiss ends and he smiles twirling her out of his arms
She stumbles and falls into the water, her white dress soaked
Both of them laughing, he picks her up and carries her to a more secluded spot,
under one of the small piers, away from everyone...

They begin kissing, hands wandering everywhere, their lips more urgent as their tongues do a dance. He slides the shoulders of her dress down and it drops to the ground. His eyes flicker over her, as he undresses She leans up against a post, he comes close to her, kissing his way down her neck, to her shoulders and inbetween her breasts, as he slowly helps her step out of her panties. Wrapping her arms around his neck, he lifts her up, gazing into eachothers eyes, as they create their own ectasty.
* * * * * * *
Opening her eyes again and looking out to sea, the image of his ship in the distance,
remembering the hug she gave him, dropping her pearls into his hands, as they said their
last and only "I love you".

A smile spreads across her face, knowing soon she'll get to say those words to him again.

Submitted on 2006-08-01 13:07:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Comments beautiful and how sweet! This just reminds me of things me and my sweety do.

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Her breath catches in her throat and time stops for a moment

So eloquent and romantically powerful. I loved it. You painted such a peacefully exotic picture through these words and I applaud you for that.

Good stuff maynard!
| Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really cute, though the ending is sad. I had this vision back in the 1950's when this couple was in their early 20's perhaps, madly in love and didn't have a care in the world. Simple and pure just as innocent as they're passion for one another. The beach was a great setting for this. The only thing I might have changed was the very end where she thinks about how she dropped her pearls into his hand before he left, and how they ended up back into the sand. It's nice she found them but I would have been a little sad finding them years later when I gave them to the person I loved, like they dropped them in the sand on purpose or they didn't want them. I don't know that probably doesn't make any sense. But overall this was really cute and I hope to read more of your writings soon! :)

| Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]

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