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    dots Submission Name: we screw up(its our identity)dots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 647/1206/773
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 806
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotswe screw up(its our identity)dots
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    we fuck up and we have to be there
    and watch as we ruin our worlds
    i think we secretly love the way life sucks
    sometimes
    so we can have a chance to get bored
    and screw everything up
    cause who would we be if we weren't messed up?




    Submitted on 2006-08-01 15:14:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      nice insight with "we secretly love the way life sucks
    sometimes;" i think that definitely has some truth to it. plus, the last line is really good. i can sometimes identify with the feeling there.
    i think if you thought of more stuff, you could make this poem longer and have more interesting thoughts to read, but i'm not one to complain about length; this piece is good as it is, too. pretty nice write.
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by explosions | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this piece. the title really got me but there was a spelling error in it. other than that this is a really great piece. you're right. what would the world be like without people like us??? i mean if there wasn't anyone like me we wouldn't need cops. all we would need is a baker, a nurse, and a mortician... oh well. great write... better read. i love your work. keep posting
    love
    tina
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]


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