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    dots Submission Name: comatosedots
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    Author: Tinasha
    ASL Info:    20/Female/Oklahoma City
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 100/142/41
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/What is
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    Description:
       you know how you have dreams, but you don't know exactly what they mean, but you can tell they mean something. and after all the pondering over it's importance, you finally give up and just accept the fact that you can't interpret it. but it's still a dream you had, and it somewhat defines you...


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    so i had a dream that i was comatose
    whatever that means i had it
    and it'll be mine until i am it
    or was it symbolic
    for something basic
    that i've mistakened
    for something rhythmic
    that'll make you move to it
    groove to it
    until i see it
    ain't legit
    just a dream i dreamt
    but it's mine




    Submitted on 2006-08-01 15:46:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      To be comatose in the spiritual sense perhaps? To not be able to hear the music of life, the drumbeats that make us move with purpose regardless of the consequences? Not sure. Dreams represent that subconscious voice inside that makes us want to realize what everything means in the purest sense... longing to hear the music and perhaps wake up for the first time, even though we think we have woken up already.

    I'm not sure. I think I'm asleep most of the time. Maybe that comatose state in your dream is how you feel already?

    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with the description; dream interpretation is pretty tricky. yet, yes, the dream is still part of you.

    so i liked this piece. i don't really understand what "it" is, though. the dream? that's a little unclear to me. also, the comatose and the "move to it/ groove to it" kind of contradict each other; maybe i just don't understand.
    i think the "ain't legit" part was a nice touch. overall, i really do like it; it puts a nice image of dreams that are yours.
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by explosions | [ Reply to This ]


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