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    dots Submission Name: Manupliation from the puppeteerdots
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    Author: red passion
    ASL Info:    15/m/Lost in my mind(KY)
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 117/291/81
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 782
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 818



    Description:
       revision of "puppets of pain"


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    dotsManupliation from the puppeteerdots
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    We wonder about everything
    about the nonsense that we think about
    We wonder whats is this feeling of love
    and can we live with doubt?

    We even wonder if we're alive, or not
    and if we are then why do we hate
    Maybe we're all just puppets
    that minds manupliate

    Maybe we're being used for something
    something greater than life, itself
    So we must cherish it
    and climb off that shelf

    Some of us feel that we should not be alive
    because we wonder about pain
    So we believe what we are
    and our fate is set

    So what is this feeling of worry
    when we haven't even experienced it yet
    Then we believe we are puppets
    that can never be hurt, only used




    Submitted on 2006-08-01 20:19:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Maybe we are just puppets, or maybe the real pain is that we dont know what our purpose is so we are left without a sense of meaning. Our souls are alone and have no meaning, so it tears us apart. We are here........for no reason. It goes against nature and life, so we feel pain.

    That could be one explanation. But I can also think of many others.

    Nice poem Lance.


    Zach
    | Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]
      my favorite is the last two lines. but i think the beginning could be improved. it seems a bit cliché.
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Itzmeemiflee | [ Reply to This ]
      Indeed, indeed. Sweet poem, man. I do wonder about many things, and wonder about this sometimes. Though I never did wonder if we were 'puppets'. It's a good spin.

    -- Jason Clement
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by Jason_Clement | [ Reply to This ]
      EXCELLENT PIECE! I completely agree with the idea of beig puppets. We are her for a reason. I cannot believe that humans, as complex as we are, came crawling out of primortial sludge. We are here to carry out a plan.
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by kriley6497 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a real thinker, the title really caught my eye and it is an interesting concept comparing human life to puppet and even more so puppets of pain, very nie imagery there is some truth in that i think, but if i think about it too hard i get depressed so later nice read.

    Peace,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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