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Manupliation from the puppeteer


Author: red passion
ASL Info:    15/m/Lost in my mind(KY)
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Words: 128
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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revision of "puppets of pain"


Manupliation from the puppeteer



We wonder about everything
about the nonsense that we think about
We wonder whats is this feeling of love
and can we live with doubt?

We even wonder if we're alive, or not
and if we are then why do we hate
Maybe we're all just puppets
that minds manupliate

Maybe we're being used for something
something greater than life, itself
So we must cherish it
and climb off that shelf

Some of us feel that we should not be alive
because we wonder about pain
So we believe what we are
and our fate is set

So what is this feeling of worry
when we haven't even experienced it yet
Then we believe we are puppets
that can never be hurt, only used




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  Maybe we are just puppets, or maybe the real pain is that we dont know what our purpose is so we are left without a sense of meaning. Our souls are alone and have no meaning, so it tears us apart. We are here........for no reason. It goes against nature and life, so we feel pain.

That could be one explanation. But I can also think of many others.

Nice poem Lance.


Zach
| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]
  my favorite is the last two lines. but i think the beginning could be improved. it seems a bit cliché.
| Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Itzmeemiflee | [ Reply to This ]
  Indeed, indeed. Sweet poem, man. I do wonder about many things, and wonder about this sometimes. Though I never did wonder if we were 'puppets'. It's a good spin.

-- Jason Clement
| Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by Jason_Clement | [ Reply to This ]
  EXCELLENT PIECE! I completely agree with the idea of beig puppets. We are her for a reason. I cannot believe that humans, as complex as we are, came crawling out of primortial sludge. We are here to carry out a plan.
| Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by kriley6497 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a real thinker, the title really caught my eye and it is an interesting concept comparing human life to puppet and even more so puppets of pain, very nie imagery there is some truth in that i think, but if i think about it too hard i get depressed so later nice read.

Peace,
Jay.
| Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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