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    dots Submission Name: " THE MARIONETTE "dots
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    Author: Jill Lynne
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 77/92/23
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       To my puppeteer-no-more.......I am nobody's marionette.


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    dots" THE MARIONETTE "dots
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    There was a time I believed in you
    And I looked the other way.....
    I know I believed what I needed to be true
    Within this lie's decay.....

    Warped and wrapped in solace
    Now
    And endeavor you make look
    So real,
    The silence is a stamp-
    Has the weight of
    Granite-
    Uncut for all to feel....

    A sharp- shrill laugh
    carving through the shadows
    Mocking and tormenting me,
    A wag of your finger
    And a tilt in your chin
    As you provoke the worst
    incessantly....

    A matron's delight
    wreaks of tainted views
    and hushed beliefs,
    A follower to lead
    By the nose and take close heed---
    If an argument ensues
    Then you must be agreed
    Or forfeit your right
    To stand or walk beside me.....

    Shittttt......
    You are a joke
    A lousy puppeteer
    I'm unamused
    By the clucking of your tongue
    By the masses you blindly steer,

    A jovial display
    Is a display nonetheless
    In the quiet of your heart
    Awaits the truth
    Or what is left....
    And when upon it finds you
    Whether life still remains within
    Or not
    I hope you remember what you lost
    Filled with bereft
    Your weak hands wrought.





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      I truly can't beleive that I am the 76th person to read this piece and the first to provide any feedback. I feel that you certainly made several strong and salient points within the body of this well constructed kiss off note. It is good sometimes to let the controlling people in our lives that the strings have been cut and we no longer dance their dance. Weel done and well said.
    | Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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