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Author: Jill Lynne
Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 77 /92 /23
Words: 207
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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To my puppeteer-no-more.......I am nobody's marionette.


There was a time I believed in you
And I looked the other way.....
I know I believed what I needed to be true
Within this lie's decay.....

Warped and wrapped in solace
And endeavor you make look
So real,
The silence is a stamp-
Has the weight of
Uncut for all to feel....

A sharp- shrill laugh
carving through the shadows
Mocking and tormenting me,
A wag of your finger
And a tilt in your chin
As you provoke the worst

A matron's delight
wreaks of tainted views
and hushed beliefs,
A follower to lead
By the nose and take close heed---
If an argument ensues
Then you must be agreed
Or forfeit your right
To stand or walk beside me.....

You are a joke
A lousy puppeteer
I'm unamused
By the clucking of your tongue
By the masses you blindly steer,

A jovial display
Is a display nonetheless
In the quiet of your heart
Awaits the truth
Or what is left....
And when upon it finds you
Whether life still remains within
Or not
I hope you remember what you lost
Filled with bereft
Your weak hands wrought.

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  I truly can't beleive that I am the 76th person to read this piece and the first to provide any feedback. I feel that you certainly made several strong and salient points within the body of this well constructed kiss off note. It is good sometimes to let the controlling people in our lives that the strings have been cut and we no longer dance their dance. Weel done and well said.
| Posted on 2007-04-18 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]

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