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    dots Submission Name: Of All The Things I Could've Beendots
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    Author: Jason_Clement
    ASL Info:    17, male
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 147/149/61
    Words: 317
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 1299
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 2027



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       These are my lyrics. Please don't steal them. They're for a song me and my band are working on.


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    Of All The Things I Could've Been
    by Jason C. Clement
    July 30th, 2006
    Jason C. Clement, 2006

    Just some words
    Thrown together as a poem
    Useless thoughts and feelings
    Help conceal the wounds I've never shown
    I keep hoping someone'll see
    And care enough to speak
    But no one will ever see the man I am, behind my lies
    It helps keep me lost, makes me weak

    Memories turn to anger, a hatred for life
    As the scars grow deeper still
    I should've left the past behind
    But I don't think I ever will
    Love is hard to find, and part of me doesn't want love
    But it's the emptiness inside that truly kills
    And it's my soul that's bleeding
    Maybe it's just the thrill

    Blind to the world, and hidden in my lies
    I stay confined inside myself
    I couldn't care less what they think
    'Cause I can't escape my self-induced hell
    My friends have tried to help me
    But all the things that they say
    Are all the things I don't want to hear
    And then they slip away, they slip away

    And here I find myself
    Staring at a photograph of you
    My mind stops again, and my head starts to spin
    I feel blissful, for only one moment
    And I happen to grin
    But then, it all hits me again
    And there I am, back on my knees
    Behind my wall of self denial

    Won't someone make me bleed?
    This is who I've always been
    Won't someone help me see?
    This is all I've ever seen
    Won't someone take my heart?
    I hate myself, and all I am
    Won't someone help me start?
    Or am I too damned
    Won't someone stand by me?
    Lonliness is all I've ever known
    Won't someone cry for me
    Hate is all I've ever shown




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      Amazing Jason
    Simply amazing
    If I were you I would put a copyright on this because I swear to you this is that good
    You have amazing talent for someone your age actually for anyone with lyrics!!!
    Amazing Job
    I wish I could here this matched with music!!!
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-08-05 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      omigosh your so good.i love it.the reasons for writing a poem and your feelings were well laid out.im soo impressed.

    jenn-bbcherry
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by bbcherry | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like it, but I couldn't find much to tie the title in. And this may not mean much to you, but something that appealed to me is this piece's flawless organization, and good grammar :S It's somewhat rare, and it does indeed make a difference. The main idea behind it, I think, is not extremely original, but the detail and layout makes it...fresher. Wish I could hear it, this site should have somewhere to put songs.
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Kunoichi | [ Reply to This ]
      this was f*cking amazing, wow.....the way it felt like you took the thoughts right out of my mind.....*hugs* I feel bad though, you seem like a really great guy and I wish you hadn't had to go through this, I know what you mean though.....part of you knows some of it is your fault, that some people might care if you just let them in and allowed them to know...and that part of you hates yourself for not just dropping down that wall long enough to show them how you're really feeling, but then another part of you hates them for not seeing...for not paying attention- not caring enough to see how you're feeling without you having to say it, and then you start to decide in your mind that you hate yourself, so why should they care? why should it matter to them? and you end up just wanting some kind of reaction from someone...even if it's hate....great write, I wish I could hear it though, anyway you should hit me up sometime, I could see getting along with you;)
    lols
    peace and love,
    ~jess
    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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