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    dots Submission Name: don't be a stranger.dots
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    Author: explosions
    ASL Info:    -237.6995/she/the library
    Elite Ratio:    6.87 - 59/50/52
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 921
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    Description:
       it's sort of nonsensical. the first stanza was all i really had in mind, i don't really like the rest. hargh.


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    dotsdon't be a stranger.dots
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    "don't be a stranger,"
    she says,
    but she's so strange herself.

    awkward conversations, the
    limelight turns grey.
    (is it original or
    just fucked up?)

    we're going nowhere

    exchanging lines of
    words and
    letters, but
    it might as well be numbers
    for all the feeling in them.

    "don't be a stranger,"
    he says,
    but
    he's
    so
    strange
    himself
    .




    Submitted on 2006-08-01 20:44:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmmmmmmm...sounds like they were made for one another! Kewl write...I liked the way you made their "connection" so monotonous. Would love to see you expand on this.
    Keep writing!
    Peace!
    Kimmy
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by KimmyMim | [ Reply to This ]
      ok..this was a little different. i liked the first part, and the last, how you tied it together. but i dont think i really got the rest of it. or really the meaning you had in mind. its one of those thoughts...i guess a lot of people have heard them, or thought them. n e way, i really dont know what i mean, i liked your write tho. maybe try to add more? it was original and kinda gave the impression of two people moving farther and farther away..."dont be a stranger"...a line that people say. but do they really mean it? what did it mean to the person/people you wrote about? lol ok, ill stop now. when i get into question mode, you cant turn me off. good job, keep it up. ~Nichole
    | Posted on 2006-08-01 00:00:00 | by butterfly_chi5 | [ Reply to This ]


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