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    dots Submission Name: one last hit (MOTHER)dots
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    Author: Sera Rojas
    Elite Ratio:    0.6 - 5/5/8
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       mother do i need to be so HIGH?


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    dotsone last hit (MOTHER)dots
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    (mother do you think IM goo d enough)
    all your money couldnt pay my way
    so tell your children not to walk my way (hahah)
    and yeah it is just a waste of time

    hush now baby baby dont you cry
    mothers gonna take you to the
    methadone clinic
    and your gonna leave a thousand time s more
    sick
    ooh mama you brought me in now take me fuckin OUT
    tonight
    at 3am when my legs feel they will break
    and i cant get warm and i cry and shake
    all the blankets and kisses
    cant take this way
    you cant understand
    where i am right now.
    poor mama you just tried TOO hard so:
    at 3am lets just make this end
    your credit cards about just ran out
    and i
    i just want
    one
    last
    hit
    and lets make it
    a big one this time




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