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Looking Glass (for Obsidion) 7-29-06 5pm


Author: ruejacobs
ASL Info:    39/feminazi/Gehenna
Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 619 /473 /167
Words: 148
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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don't ask me.
i don't know...


Looking Glass (for Obsidion) 7-29-06 5pm



i float inside this crystal cocoon
like the larvae preserved
within an amber shell
i stir between mercury, silver and glass
time has slowed now

glass is a liquid, you know
it flows imperceptably through millenium
and now i am liquid, as well
i fill this shell, this void

i am made tangible again
a residual trace of spirit
in cryogenic stasis
a prismatic representation
of one thousand souls
in focussed laser and honed adaptation
i have no terminal form

what you are is what you get
pure as any binary code
in pixilated technicolor
the crystal grows
as it will in any geode
it will not be denied
and is limitted only by
the artifice of boundary

the flesh you perceive
is transitory as the speed of light
the shadow stretches
inside the chrysalis

the pheonix rebuilds her prison




Submitted on 2006-08-02 00:30:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is aweomse! you need to get your work published. only two minor changes i see that i'd make. i think you meant 'millenia' in line 7. also i would delete 'i am ' at the beginning of the 3rd stanza. terrific work!

peace,

joe
| Posted on 2006-08-05 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
  um...wow. for one your vocabulary and mastery of the english laguage astounds me . i am glad that i got the chance to read this piece. these aren't words i'd normally use, or learned at one point in time, and never used again-and now they are placed atop that great dictionary stack, and may be recycled.

well this seemed like one of those random pieces just by reading your description, but this piece was targeted at something in particular, perhaps something hidden deep off in the far stretches of your subconscious, or dream state, and was just then emerging.

i loved the symbolism and imagery that this piece created for me, as though i was that ball of mercury, transforming, morphing and conforming to societies constraints, binds and vices in search of social acceptance...anyways thats just a glimpse of what this poem spurred within me.

i greatly enjoyed the write, and i look forward to reading more of your poetry.

merry meet and blessed be
Loquacious mind aka Suicidal Mute
| Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Loquacious Mind | [ Reply to This ]


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