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    dots Submission Name: Jinxeddots

    Author: EseanB
    ASL Info:    30/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 99/138/84
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Again about the "x-wife".

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    Another month goes by,
    Oh why oh why,
    How I wish I could fly.

    Another day goes by,
    And I don't lie,
    My "wife" is planned to die.

    Not yet divorced,
    Yet far from true marriage,
    How did I choose this course?

    I lost love for her,
    And found love in somebody else,
    How I want to hear the kitty purr.

    Auto-immune disease is a slow death,
    It targets your body,
    Then eats you alive.

    Can't be cured,
    Can't be slowed,
    It's an unstoppable death.

    I may have fallen out of love,
    I may have been hurt more than I should,
    But why does someone have to die?

    My girls have a chance of inheritance,
    Not money or fame,
    Only this disease and mental disorders.

    What is the point,
    I only wanted happiness,
    But instead I have been dealt sadness.

    Submitted on 2006-08-02 05:22:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      my gosh your poems about your wife are gonna make me cry! it was good but i dind't get the last line in the fourth stanza about a kitty purring....but that's ok. keep writing
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]

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