Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Excusesdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Abort_Chaotic
    ASL Info:    19 almost 20
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 201/172/50
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
    Total Views: 957
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1475



    Description:
       it's hardly a rant, self-worth gone down the tubes of society is the best you can expect.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsExcusesdots
    -------------------------------------------


    sit by and watch the days go by,
    all we've missed, life was hardly witnessed.
    these substances got too bleak and dry,
    panic off the paranoia we can't get caught,
    don't worry baby i wont make a noise, i wont cry.

    what a failure i am you say,
    like i haven't already told myself a thousand times,
    get ready to waste away another day.
    euphoria comes,
    part the clouds with your fingers, don't be shy.
    for life, her blue eyes hold my soul.
    soar high and don't let this love die.
    i'll try my hardest not to cry.

    cut me down to my last string,
    raw and bleeding with a running nose.
    a sickness called an excuse,
    i'm sorry i can't be perfect,
    preach the prayer of failure, you've created what you wrecked.

    what a failure i am you say,
    like i haven't already told myself a thousand times,
    get ready to waste away another day.
    euphoria comes,
    part the clouds with your fingers, don't be shy.
    for life, her blue eyes hold my soul.
    soar high and don't let this love die.
    i'll try my hardest not to cry

    no-self esteem, how was the news mother,
    when you found out that you gave this filth birth,
    with one excuse to not tug the last string,
    i'll ask myself in a penny of self worth.




    Submitted on 2006-08-02 08:57:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Wow, sad that I'm the first to comment on a piece of wonderful work ( which I rarely get to do) I think that we use too many excuses and i like the fact that you say "hey, i'm sorry I'm not perfect," and that's true, you're not...you're only you...
    | Posted on 2006-11-10 00:00:00 | by Twisted | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    113039

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry