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    dots Submission Name: Power and Greeddots

    Author: xana
    ASL Info:    17/F/SC
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 34/35/24
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsPower and Greeddots

    Refuse to believe, refuse to agree
    We live in the world of power and greed.
    Brutality rules, humanity dies
    Smoke clogs the pores of once clear skies.
    smiled die away, frowns win the spot
    In all the illusions society rots.
    There is no prosperity, there are no parades
    There only the moans of overworked slaves.
    Because of techonology, people know not
    IQ points drop further then if from the drugs.
    Machines do our brain work and we let them to
    We are getting dumber, the smart are the few
    The few that will rull over the grey mass
    And build more machines to keep them from stress.
    The cycle of nature, the cycle of us
    It never will stop, it is our lust.
    We know it is here, but we close our eyes
    We're falling asleep and quietly die.

    Submitted on 2006-08-02 14:09:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i have written poems in the past quite similar 2 this, i know wot ur sayin. i loved the last 2 lines,it's as like,if we ignore it will go away,only it won't. loved it!!
    | Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. It's cool and I feel the exact same way. just watch your spelling in a few places and you can write it in stone. keep it up. Byeyahs
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Lizzy B | [ Reply to This ]

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