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EVER AFTER


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 136
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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can you meet the horizon?


EVER AFTER



I read a story
when I was young
that ever after and happiness
go hand in hand.
So I dreamt of my prince
or my knight
or a sexy Denzel look alike
would come to sweep me off my feet,
shower me with diamonds
and roses
and kisses
while carrying me over the
threshold of happily ever after.

No one told me about
communication, patience
tolerance for the things that men do.
Forgotten toilet seats
dishes in the sink
Monday night foot ball taking over
my television.
Less space in my bed.
Enough said.

So where is that
happily ever after
ending I used to read about?
I’m still waiting
anticipating
meeting the horizon
and finding out what
happily ever after is.





Submitted on 2006-08-02 17:21:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I likes this one a lot also!
very good write
the last stanzza was my favorite
it was very precise
nice job!
| Posted on 2007-10-04 00:00:00 | by tiffaroox3 | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm 29, married and still lookin for 'happy ever after'!! lol
im begining to feel its a myth. a legend.
great poem. i think it expresses every females thoughts exactly!
whirl**
| Posted on 2006-08-12 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem was written very well.. I like the association to typical children's books at the beginning. I like the last stanza how you turn it into your happily ever after. how you are still waiting for this happy thing to happen. keep up the good write.

R.Bayden
| Posted on 2006-08-04 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked the way your poem's written. It was kind of sad but fun. I don't know if that's what you meant, or what you wanted. Anyways, it's original, and it has an important message. Happiness is not an easy thing to achieve.

I liked the ending because you said, that you don't know everything about life or happiness, but you know that maybe in the future you will know, so you're waiting for that.

I’m still waiting
anticipating
meeting the horizon
and finding out what
happily ever after is.

Good job!

Keep writing.

XoXo
Gaby
| Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Lost_Delirious | [ Reply to This ]


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