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    dots Submission Name: EVER AFTERdots
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    Author: mimi
    ASL Info:    30/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597/390/111
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       can you meet the horizon?


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    dotsEVER AFTERdots
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    I read a story
    when I was young
    that ever after and happiness
    go hand in hand.
    So I dreamt of my prince
    or my knight
    or a sexy Denzel look alike
    would come to sweep me off my feet,
    shower me with diamonds
    and roses
    and kisses
    while carrying me over the
    threshold of happily ever after.

    No one told me about
    communication, patience
    tolerance for the things that men do.
    Forgotten toilet seats
    dishes in the sink
    Monday night foot ball taking over
    my television.
    Less space in my bed.
    Enough said.

    So where is that
    happily ever after
    ending I used to read about?
    Iím still waiting
    anticipating
    meeting the horizon
    and finding out what
    happily ever after is.





    Submitted on 2006-08-02 17:21:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I likes this one a lot also!
    very good write
    the last stanzza was my favorite
    it was very precise
    nice job!
    | Posted on 2007-10-04 00:00:00 | by tiffaroox3 | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm 29, married and still lookin for 'happy ever after'!! lol
    im begining to feel its a myth. a legend.
    great poem. i think it expresses every females thoughts exactly!
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-08-12 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem was written very well.. I like the association to typical children's books at the beginning. I like the last stanza how you turn it into your happily ever after. how you are still waiting for this happy thing to happen. keep up the good write.

    R.Bayden
    | Posted on 2006-08-04 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the way your poem's written. It was kind of sad but fun. I don't know if that's what you meant, or what you wanted. Anyways, it's original, and it has an important message. Happiness is not an easy thing to achieve.

    I liked the ending because you said, that you don't know everything about life or happiness, but you know that maybe in the future you will know, so you're waiting for that.

    Iím still waiting
    anticipating
    meeting the horizon
    and finding out what
    happily ever after is.

    Good job!

    Keep writing.

    XoXo
    Gaby
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Lost_Delirious | [ Reply to This ]


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