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    dots Submission Name: Girl With the Sweetest Smiledots
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    Author: DeepsLighter
    ASL Info:    17/f/Brazil
    Elite Ratio:    7.89 - 97/62/14
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Misc/
    Total Views: 727
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1060



    Description:
       this is a poem dedicated to a best friend ...
    someone who entered my life, and changed it for the better ... and then she had to move ...
    I really miss you Link.


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    dotsGirl With the Sweetest Smiledots
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    If you ever feel down,
    She'll be there.
    If you need to talk,
    She'll be there.

    She's the girl who everyone goes to,
    the girl who forgets her problems
    in light of her friend's suffering.

    The girl with the sweetest smile;
    With the loudest laugh;
    and with the precious words;
    The girl who's everyone's best friend.

    However ....
    If she doesn't like you,
    You better not mess with her.
    She is anything but a push over,
    and she is nothing close to high maintenance.

    All it takes to get over a fight with her
    is a simple apology.
    A simple conversation
    and it seems as nothing ever happened.

    Everyone at school loves her,
    No one who met her
    could ever forget her.

    No ... not even after she left ..
    not the girl with the precious words ...
    not her with her loud laugh,
    or her sweet smile.




    Submitted on 2006-08-02 20:38:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      How can one say anything bad to this Deeps. . . I'm sure many of us have an experience of this one too many times. I like your poem for the pure and raw simplicity of it. . . there's no metaphors nor read between the lines deal. It is what it is and the dedication makes it all the more grand.
    I'm sooooooo glad you wrote another one.
    -stacey m-
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by idlewriter | [ Reply to This ]
      theres something really repetitive about this that i dont like, but thats just me.

    i think ite great when you meet people like this. tehy can erally get you through stuff, normally you didnt even consider you needed help getting through ut until then.
    hope that you meet them again, i really do.
    hope the world treats them well.

    evelyn.
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]
      well this piece was dedicated to a certain someone who obviously meant a lot to you, so its not my place to comment offensively, but the repitition did get to me a bit in the 3rd stanza starting with the first and second.

    the last stanza was the most touching of them all. almost haunting, leaving a slight nostalgic scent of her to linger in...

    Loquacious Mind
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Loquacious Mind | [ Reply to This ]


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