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    dots Submission Name: Zimmer Graduates High Schooldots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 332
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1219
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 2219



    Description:
       In my English class we read some work by Paul Zimmer, who writes a lot of humorous self-depecating poems. There's one called "Zimmer in Grade School," in which he portrays himself as a loser who's always in trouble and never does anything right. I kind of wanted to give him a happy ending.


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    dotsZimmer Graduates High Schooldots
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    The parking lot is jammed, the stadium crammed
    with parents and their parents;
    Up ahead hang freedom and July.
    Speeches are made, then Principal Aaron
    follows with a rule:

    “Please hold your applause
    until all 799 students have crossed.”

    Abernathy strolls forward as
    fans scorn Aaron’s command.
    Familial whoops and clapping commence
    for Adams, Andrews, Archer
    then Bates, Beddingfield, Bourne (airhorn)
    Cheers as Cunningham comes
    across on crutches, then Davenport,
    Davison, Dunmore, Ellinor...

    Lang, Lawrence, Levine
    The crowd is losing steam.
    Three hundred yet to go.
    Lulled into compliance, there's no
    congratulating the miracle of Mycowski
    matriculating in maternity,
    but the paraplegic Patterson
    rolls to polite acclaim.

    Meanwhile in the back row
    Wilson and Woo slide a smuggled Igloo
    from beneath their blue satin gowns.
    (Plenty of time for a couple cold ones.)
    Petrie, Ruiz, Slavinsky –that clown
    gets a laugh for flashing his brown
    I’m With Stupid t-shirt at the flashing cameras.
    Truman, Tyler, Underwood, Upshaw
    all eyes are on the exits now.
    Valentine, Vernon, Vogle, Vorhees
    Ladies gather purses, gentlemen grope for car keys.
    Williams? Pssst, you’re up! (Elbow.)
    Wilson, Woo, and then a time out
    for Aaron’s final crack at control:

    “Graduates, let me remind you not to toss your
    mortarboards, as someone could lose an eye.”

    (rim shot)
    Wyman, Yeldell, Young, and

    ... Zimmer!

    What’s left of the crowd explodes in
    airhorns and admiration
    as Zimmer staggers stageward,
    hands raised in victory.
    From folds of blue robe he
    produces his last longneck,
    handing it off in surprised exchange
    for a rolled diploma.

    799 cornered caps,
    like flying fish suddenly airborne,
    soar toward the sun
    out of a blue satin sea.




    Submitted on 2006-08-03 00:20:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Another good one. Captures the moment very well, though I might consider shortening it a bit. Last stanza's very well done; most of these I read tend to fall into sappy clichés at the end. Yours ends well.

    Peace,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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