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    dots Submission Name: Intoxicated Darknessdots
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    Author: Desi
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 210/151/34
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Is there no end ? Waiting for a happy ending..


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    I’m sitting here in the dark thinking…
    What is it that keeps you drinking,
    Night after night …
    It is like a nightmare, scary and dark…
    It consumes, takes over your self control..
    Won’t let you go, takes you down this
    Wretched path, into intoxicated darkness.
    Then each morning it lets go for a bit…
    While it waits until again it take you into its grip,
    hoping someday
    In the intoxicated state you will
    Surrender to him…
    Never again to see the morning light, to be free
    to reunite with the life
    It took from your sight..
    Away from the ones who love you..
    When will it end ..
    Or is there no end…
    Thinking, sitting here in the dark,
    It is tearing me apart
    Breaking my heart…






    Submitted on 2006-08-03 01:36:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've enjoyed this. It reminded me of my lost grandfather. May he rest in peace! He was like that for the most part of his life. My grandma would always start arguments about it. But at the end of his life he almost quit it and became the nicest person ever...
    | Posted on 2011-07-08 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm a recovering alcoholic, and can relate to the theme of this excellent poem. Alcoholics live in denial, which allows them to not see the hurt and pain they are causing others, as well as the harm they are doing to themselves. I've stayed sober for over 20 years now, but daily regret the irresponsibility of my drinking.

    You write remarkably, with excellent thought given to selection of title, and honest talent and effort given to the form and theme of your work.

    Bravo on another well written poem!
    | Posted on 2011-01-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      It has a feeling of sadness? I like this poem! Kind of reminds me of one I just wrote? Come read it and see if you agrea? Anyway nice write!!!
    Kelley Frost

    P.S. The poem is called A Man All Alone.
    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Touching exploration of emotional (and spiritual?) conflict. Ushers the reader into the dark to remember their own struggles. There is enough unsaid to generate a sense of mystery (is the narrator in an abusive relationship? fighting addiction? considering suicide?). You want to yell "Walk away!" Nice read.
    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by Silver Scion | [ Reply to This ]


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