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    dots Submission Name: Poem 4 loc bluedots
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    Author: Poeticprincess
    ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333/325/104
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1371
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 366



    Description:
       I'm Sprung lol. I admit it, he got me sprung, anyways he told me to write him a poem so i wrote this lol. its kinda idk..not my style but anyways tell me what you think


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    dotsPoem 4 loc bluedots
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    Roses are red
    violets are blue
    how can i express
    how much i love you

    wishing my lips 2 your lips
    so my heart can reach the sky
    when i'm talking to you
    it's impossible 2 lie

    So why try?
    I mean shit the sky is still blue
    so what else can i say other than
    i love you




    Submitted on 2006-08-03 12:39:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is cute, dosen't flow quite right but it's cute.
    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah I agree with dude...it don't flow that right...but if my girl gave me some [censored] like this it would still make me happy...
    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]


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