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Poem 4 loc blue

Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 61
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I'm Sprung lol. I admit it, he got me sprung, anyways he told me to write him a poem so i wrote this lol. its kinda idk..not my style but anyways tell me what you think

Poem 4 loc blue

Roses are red
violets are blue
how can i express
how much i love you

wishing my lips 2 your lips
so my heart can reach the sky
when i'm talking to you
it's impossible 2 lie

So why try?
I mean shit the sky is still blue
so what else can i say other than
i love you

Submitted on 2006-08-03 12:39:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is cute, dosen't flow quite right but it's cute.
| Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
  yeah I agree with don't flow that right...but if my girl gave me some [censored] like this it would still make me happy...
| Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]

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