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    dots Submission Name: Push to Breakdots
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    Author: butterfly wings
    ASL Info:    20/F/ Miami
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 264/309/53
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 975
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 891



    Description:
       this isn't for the faint of heart. this is dirty, rough, and abuse is the topic. no happy ending, just pain. no, it didn't happen to me. Let me know how it reads....


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    dotsPush to Breakdots
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    Push harder into me than that,
    Make sure I remember that,
    Thrust down deep,
    Make me scream!
    Always liked that,
    I love when you try to break me in half.
    Perfect,
    Keep pushing me down.
    Is this ok?
    Are you happy now?!
    Ignore me please, Thats what I need.
    Push me harder,
    That wall didn't hurt,
    I love the feel of that horrible rugburn....
    Tear me apart,
    I know that you care,
    When you make me bleed from there...
    More, Of course.....
    My body is yours!
    Throw me where you want me,
    Like you always did before!
    Remember that I'm nothing without you,
    Simple someone elses whore.
    I know I'm a bore,
    That I'm used up ,
    And have been spit out.
    Thank god that I'm not without......




    Submitted on 2006-08-03 13:18:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i wished i was of more use to you it seems like you need help... its graphic, and the topic as we all know is up my alley. id think more exclamations but thats just me....
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by wolfwoodphreak | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty explicit. It started off kind of like good sex to me.........but then you did go to that point with it when I was like....Hmmmmm?.....don't really know if I want that to happen!

    I liked it though. You did put a lot of depth into this one. You had me feelin some sorrow at the end and it's hard to get me that emotionally involved in a write.

    I applaude the boldness. Not too many will freely use words that aren't of "class". You went out on that limb.

    Good joB!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      holly sh!t!!! man you were right about everything you said, expecially the twisted part. it seems like abuse or sex, but watever it is it's yecatching. i love how you don't know what to think of this. yu want to think it's sx then one minute you think it's a fight and that the person loves the pain and attention. you got my mind boggled and ondering. i would like to see a sequal to this, but even more twisted. great right and deff. a fav.

    brandon
    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by disturbedx1000 | [ Reply to This ]


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