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    dots Submission Name: Overdoseddots
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    Author: darkeveris
    ASL Info:    19/F/Someplace silent
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 34/62/38
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1050
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 819



    Description:
       My attempt on writting music...not the best


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    dotsOverdoseddots
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    You are my drug
    My sexy high
    The needle of heroin
    My Ecstasy
    Pill of sins
    Dancing like a star
    Seducing hearts

    (Chorus)
    I am Overdosed
    Gazing at deaths embrace
    Overindulged
    Body’s withering away

    You are my drug
    My sexy high
    My sweetest stimulate
    With candy thighs
    Poison skin
    I feel fascination
    With a profligated life

    Chorus

    You are my drug
    My sexy high
    Here I lay
    Overwhelmed
    Lost all control
    You broke me down
    Now you walk away

    Chorus

    I am overdosed
    …….overdosed
    Overindulged
    Breaking apart
    Withered away




    Submitted on 2006-08-03 14:27:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      thats pretty good for a first shot at writing a song. i dont think you should change anything but idk cause im not good at writing songs so yeah lol.


    Tatum
    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by spikerz1621 | [ Reply to This ]
      this song was serious
    the chorus was soothing yet pain driven.

    THe metaphor of a lover as a drug
    is generic but you uniquely described in your lines emotion that people can related too.

    NIce work

    Im thinkin we should write somethin
    together
    but lets talk later

    PC
    | Posted on 2006-08-04 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn this is good!. Even if you think it's not.. I would like to hear it if you ever did put this into a song.. I like the way you descibed the temtatioin and the pain, and the happiness and the love all together it flowed well.. And I like the end alot.. It made me want to read it again (so i did).. And for ur first time this exceptionally well.. Good job girl

    -medicated
    | Posted on 2006-08-29 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
      now you walk away?
    | Posted on 2006-08-04 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]


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