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    dots Submission Name: Lonlinessdots
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    Author: irvine_valentin
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 43/74/15
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Description:
       OK I wrote this after being single for several months and it started to get me down. A lot of it I couldn't put down


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    dotsLonlinessdots
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    Pain
    The heart renching pain of knowing that
    What you feared
    Will come true
    That you will die alone
    No matter who you are
    Or what you do
    Rich or Poor
    Fat or Thin
    Famous or not
    Ashes to ashes
    Dust to dust
    You're born alone
    You die alone
    And no amount of fans, groupies or loved ones will stop that




    Submitted on 2006-08-03 18:00:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "The heart renching pain of knowing that
    What you feared
    Will come true
    That you will die alone
    No matter who you are
    Or what you do"

    I think that's my favorite part, although I like the whole thing.
    It's sad... but true.

    Sorry I can't make this better. I have to go kill my mom.

    Good stuff
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      My Friend I really like this
    This is sad but I feel like these words are what many people or musicians want to say
    I couldnt help but think of Kurt Cobain reading this
    This is very strong
    You carried the emotion with every word
    I certainly will be back to your page to read more of your writes
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-08-03 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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