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    dots Submission Name: Servitude to Emotiondots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsServitude to Emotiondots
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    Everything is material but love and sorrow,
    Both I care not borrow.
    Sorrow draining my mind toward depressed,
    Yet love can not be suppressed.
    Both are equally weary to my soul,
    Grinding and tearing, away it will not go.
    Both falling upon me; I not noticing when they start.
    Flaying my meek and puny heart.
    Defenses I will never have,
    But this does not make me sad.
    I donít regret emotions of what is and is not real,
    At least I know I am capable enough to feel.




    Submitted on 2004-01-25 22:17:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah this is short and very sweet. "Both I care not borrow." is that a typo since it through me off abit. I can totally realte to your work here, some of mine is very similar...
    | Posted on 2004-01-26 00:00:00 | by ShadowHarlequin | [ Reply to This ]


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