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    dots Submission Name: Lies untold, secrecs unfolddots
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    Author: BlueHeart
    ASL Info:    14/M/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 14/24/19
    Words: 656
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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       Look, I have the worsst writer's block ever right now, and I'm sorry I can't write well, it's really horrible but it's like the orange tree is out of oranges, wait till next season.


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    dotsLies untold, secrecs unfolddots
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    "You know, we never said 'I love you'"

    "Well, I love you"

    "Awe, I love you too"

    Unresolved feelings lead to grief most of the time, which is what I learned a week ago when Byron dumped me. Three days after our break up I received word he was cutting. Was I the cause? Apparently, I was. I couldn't understand why a week and a half long relationship could cause someone to do something so serious. I don't even want to think of what might happen when he gets into an actual serious relationship, is is dumped by his significant other! Suicide? Temptaion.
    I really tried to get him to stop, I truly did. I ended up basically just telling him he had to either stop or I wasn't going to speak to him again. Of course, he didn't stop, we were broken up, I didn't really matter anymore to him. He didn't trust me.
    I did end up giving him the link to this blog, which is my reasoning for not writing in a week. I know nobody reads, but this is some of my best writing. He found out all the lies I had told him, and now he doesn't trust me, probably never will. He even told me it was a mistake that I gave him the link to it. But, it seemed like the right thing to do. Isn't the truth important to a relationship?

    In a relationship, is honesty really the best policy?

    In a relationship, or in life for that matter, secrets have to be kept, and I have a secret that I won't let Byron know yet.

    I found someone else. Ironically just as far away as Byron, Mason is wonderful. Believe me, I'm not getting into the same kind of relationship as I did with Byron. Mason, I have been totally honest with him, on every single thing we've talked about. It's as if the truth brought us closer. I just can't see anything wrong with him, he's so.........genuinely perfect.

    "I want you to want me to be your everything"

    My heart nearly melted, another insta-crush...

    "That's good because that's exactly what I want"

    "That's from a song"

    Wow, forever embarassed, I had to make up for it, but how?

    He must've sensed my embarassment, before I could take the shame back he had to melt my heart again.

    "I think I'm falling for you, and that's from no song"

    Of course I had to say the wrong thing

    "I feel the same way"

    I mean, what's up with that? I feel the same way. Was I afraid to tell him I was falling in love with him? Was I afriad it was too soon? Wasn't our relationship supposed to be based on honesty? I should've but I just wasn't ready yet, afriad we would turn out to be like Byron and Dan.

    "I miss your voice, can I call you?"

    He calls me perfection, but he doesn't see my flaws. The sweetest guy in the world, Mason. Our first talk on the phone, the previous night was 6 hours long. That's 360 minutes, 21,600 seconds of pure joy.

    I'm in love, and I really feel like I could spend the rest of my life with this one person, but what if we broke up?




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      I thought that this was very expressive and told a lot about your feelings and stuff. I hope that your relationship with Mason continues to be strong and true. I think that in every relationship, telling the truth is one of the key things to keep your relationship going. I hope that your ex Byron, stops cutting himself and finds a new happiness. I wish you all th worlds happiness and the curse of writer's block which you claim to have to go away. Keep writing.
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-08-04 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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