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    dots Submission Name: chocolate metropolisdots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1125
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1367



    Description:
       our current mayor was trying to get re-elected and he made a speech to try to get the african american vote. so he said he wanted new orleans to be a "chocolate city". that's where the title comes from. it's not really about new orleans though.
    i put a dragonball z punchline in this one. lol


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    dotschocolate metropolisdots
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    Killa flow that I can demolish the prophets with
    Astonish the populace of Ray Naginís Chocolate Metropolis
    Niggas know they wonít keep it, theyíre just glad when they cop the shit
    Trapped in the Matrix with your mind stored on a floppy disk
    My dad told me ďslow down, itĎs time that you stopped these risksĒ
    But Iím a pessimist so death has got to be positive
    Give back to the art, thatís my highest prerogative
    Knowledge is power but it canít match the understanding that Logic gives
    Ainít hit mainstream yet cuz my style is peculiar
    Hip hopís nun, smacking whack rappers with paddles and rulers
    Donít let the attitude fool ya
    Pissed at the people who rock more ice than Frieza and Cooler
    Forget Kay, Kanye already told you Sierra Leone is your jeweler
    And diamonds are forever
    So those who see a latter to the top and start climbing together
    Those mother fuckers usually start dying together
    Even when sunshine is the weather
    The hourglass runs out of sand just to let you know your time has been measured
    And when the Fates stretch the cord you know your line has been severed
    Canít pay my mortgage cuz I owe so many fines to my debtors
    Hoping for alleviation but expecting that mine will never get better
    Yep




    Submitted on 2006-08-04 10:28:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this one was pretty neat bro. you see, in this one you used a bit more profanity than your others. I like the idea of it, very political, meets media, meets dissing.
    | Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      im fan of this post , big time, DBZ was the seller.HA, i used to idolize goku (he kills frieza and cooler) back in the day.

    but on the serious 'tip' this verse spoke LOGIC like a dagger into any politician or FEMA affiliate.

    Ya word play was on point, and the rhymes ran together with a good flow(i don t know about 'killa' flow but it was good)

    refreshing read
    PC
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the pessimist line. I would say sumthin bout ur dragon ball z reference but i dont watch that show sry. This was nice but it didnt reall draw me in. Mayb cause its about politics and i dont like to touch that subject i dunno wateva.

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2006-09-10 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]


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